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The sadistic CEO of Weston Sentries, Shelia Weston, has just landed the biggest sale her company has ever seen. A huge sale like that calls for a celebratory and special dinner roast!
This is a shorter version of the story, with an alternate ending. Here is the full original version with a live swallowing whole prey, and escape attempt scenario: https://aryion.com/g4/view/752034
Let me know what you think! Is this something you would want to see a part 2 of?
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Posted by jordan111 2 years ago Report
Well done! (Not pun intended), I like mean, arrogant and slightly malevolent Shelia and also the fact, that not everything went exactly as she'd planned. There are many interesting details which add an extra flavour to the plot. Your work deserves more attention, but the same as for Natalie's case, Life's not fair after all :)
Posted by Eorsden 2 years ago Report
Thank you! The details like those in the stories I write are probably my favorite parts to include! haha and true, life's not fair! Thanks for the comment :)
Posted by jordan111 2 years ago Report
Speaking of the other details, I'd describe more of the Nat's ropework and maybe her preparation process, frankly, that might be more about my personal preferences than about objective critique :), but it would definitely fit in the scenario and maybe it would not only help to draw attention to the other details but also to complete the whole picture of Nat's peril in general :)
Speaking of parts, the sequel would make sense, however it is probably a bit more difficult to link the ropes, expand the original characters and follow the first part up than to start a new idea from the scratch.
Posted by Eorsden 2 years ago Report
haha Yes That would! I think for this story in particular I was focusing on Shelia's point of view as the cruel pred. I wanted it to be clear that she really could care less about Natalie as anything more than a meal. So it was less about Natalie's predicament and more about Shelia's thoughts and feelings. But more detail on the rope work would definitely go with the theme of treating Natalie like Shelia's property and meal. I'll keep that in mind :). I would say there is also more detail on Natalie's predicament in the original one I wrote (not on ropework), but over all in Natalie's condition. However it does not end in a roast like this one.
If i did a sequel to the AE, my thoughts were that i would go into the days after Natalie was eaten. So it would be about Natalie's sister who tries to find out what happened to her sister (to no avail). Then Shelia would find out about Natalie's sister and purchase her for a meal just as she had done to Natalie. The sister would then be prepped and cooked at Shelia's hands all while Shelia enjoyed the pleasure of telling her how she had roasted and devoured her sister.
I'm not sure if i'm going to do it though, Im currently working on two other stories that are taking my attention haha but we will see! But i absolutely love Shelia as a pred. Probably my favorite pred I've written :) The cruel and powerful is my fav. :)
Posted by jordan111 2 years ago Report
Writting is an art and so it cannot be forced or pushed, when you feel that the time is right, your audience will be pleased to read a part two :) I wish you find the right power of the word in the other two stories.