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Summary: Dot drags a reluctant Chammy to a new park attraction that had just recently opened, claiming that the park has fifteen-foot giant human-creature and animal hybrid men. After Chammy has her skeptical eyes slowly opened to the impossible truth, the two women become particularly aquainted with a couple of quirky, giant winged boys that seem to have taken a particular interest in them. And Chammy and Dot become a bit more familiar with the park's other 'attractions', until it's time for the establishment to close. But that's when things take a worrisome turn for the unexpected...
Excerpt: "Chammy!"
This was going a little too far if the park was actually making these claims. It was one thing to be vague in advertisements, but even claiming these giant men were found around the world? Her frown deepened as she scanned another few lines of text.
"Chammy, look!"
"Wait," she mumbled, still nose-deep in the pamphlet. "I'm trying to figure this out."
"LOOK!"
Before the brunette could respond, she felt a grip on her head, wrenching it to face the right side glass windows. "Dot! Dammit, I was just trying to read thi---"
Her speech died and her eyes widened in utter astonishment of what they were seeing. No more than twenty or thirty feet away from the tunnel of park-goers, there was a figure curled up on the ground, appearing to be asleep. The face looked like that of a young man, reddish hair covering his scalp, and two long, fox-like ears poked up from the messy mane. Instead of hands, he had paws and reddish-brown fur up to around his elbows, the same shade of fur then covering his lower half beyond his hips. And curled around his legs was a long, fluffy tail of the same shade.
Chammy stared in disbelief of the gentle, life-like motions of his breaths as he appeared to snooze in the late afternoon sun, splayed out over the grass like a small, living mountain.
"N...No way..." the words passed her lips in barely a ghost of her voice as she moved closer to the window. She couldn't see any jerky movements that suggested a metallic build. His ears gave a little twitch now and then, but not in the robotic, pre-determined pattern she expected.
"He's real," Dot said without even trying to contain her awe, pressing up close to the glass, her long blonde hair spilling over her shoulders as she leaned forward. "I told you! I told you this had to be the real thing!"
...Phew. This monster of a fic and idea has been almost a year in the making, but has gotten so lengthy that I see no choice but to cut it into at least two parts. This was first spawned after a movie night last year with folks on my discord server, in which we watched Jurrasic Park. And the idea of a park with giant monsterbois just would NOT leave me alone. So this was born. And I invited my friend Dotto along for the ride with Chammy, who consented in allowing me to use her character. (And you'll also see a little cameo of her orca boy, Kaleo, in here too!)
Anyway, I hope that you guys enjoy this! Let me know if you'd like to see part two when it's finished (in which you can look forward to some heart-pounding chases, sexual scenes, and the intimate type of vore scenes that I tend to write, as well~)
Thank you for reading! Feedback would be greatly welcome and appreciated. I'm trying to find my footing in the vore community again, but feeling estranged from everything makes it hard.
Edit: RTF didn't upload properly, so I changed the file type to doc with a converter and reuploaded... Hopefully it's better now.
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Posted by Zephyr42 4 years ago Report
I like this idea! Also, very nice introduction of the leads and their relationships. I'd love to see part two when this comes out.
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks a lot! I'm glad you thought so! I will indeed be working on the second part (and about a half-dozen of the other dozen unfinished things I have laying around...).
Posted by Zephyr42 4 years ago Report
Awesome, I can't wait to see what you turn out next.
Posted by StarlingJay 4 years ago Report
Very well written! Interesting concept and fun banter between characters. I was drawn into the story pretty quickly, and it held my attention to the very end, which is always the most important (and most difficult) goal in storytelling.
Just a couple of nitpicks, the only section that felt like it detracted a little from the story was the explanation as to why the government / scientists might have been unaware of the phenomena; I feel like it wasn't a very convincing explanation and the topic didn't really need to have been brought up at all, unless it plays a major role in the plot later. One more thing, Dot mentioned at the beginning of the story that people had posted pictures of the monster boys in reviews online, in an effort to convince Chammy that they were real. But soon afterwards, we were told that park visitors weren't allowed to take pictures or videos at all, deterring Dot from taking any herself. Of course, people could always just break the rule and take pictures anyways, but it seemed a little inconsistent that not only was the park not very strict with enforcing their picture policy or having pictures online taken down, but pictures were also a catalyst to spark Dot's interest in the park, while not really even being allowed to begin with. This also doesn't mesh well with the idea that the government and other important figures aren't aware of the monster boys; if these images were posted online, then the government, etc. would have all been well aware and would have investigated, realistically (unless the government and scientists are in cahoots and actually created these monster boys themselves, and are just keeping a lid on it). These aren't huge glaring plot holes or anything, but they're little things that I picked up from an initial read and figured I would give some feedback about. Great work nonetheless, and I'm eager to know what happens next!
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks a lot! I'm glad you enjoyed the concept~ And thanks a lot for the feedback!
Yeah, I have this bad habit of trying to explain things in stories, even when there are parts of them that just don't make any sense. They seem so glaring when I think about them that I try to push an explanation into the narrative or dialogue to not make it seem as random, but it often still doesn't fit well. I wanted to write this concept, but also had a hard time believing that something of this nature would be able to open in the modern world. So eventually, I just had Chammy say that money probably had a lot to do with why the government wasn't doing anything about it (as that DOES seem to allow lots of shady things to go on nowadays, in the government and out of it). As for the pictures, fair point. I figured that the ones Dot saw were taken by the park itself, so they were probably tasteful and didn't reveal too much. Whereas the guys in the park are actually naked---so I had Chammy allude to the posting of 'monster dicks' on Twitter. As I feel that's probably what a lot of people would do in these situations. Thus cameras/photography is prohibited. lol But yeah, my apologies for the plot gaps and bits that didn't make sense. I try to offer some explanation in stories, but for things like this, it's really hard to come up with something that would actually make sense. So I figured the government and other interested parties were likely paid off or promised something behind closed doors. Either way, it's a gratuitous way for me to write some giant monsterboy porn and vore eventually. Hahaha. Thanks again for the feedback!
Posted by StarlingJay 4 years ago Report
No problem! I can relate to wanting to scratch that vore itch without caring about explaining the inner workings of things. Sometimes you're so excited about writing what you know is going to happen that you just want to get to the meat of the story. Keep up the good work and thanks for your response!
Posted by mystarfear 4 years ago Report
this concept is A+ and I'm really caught up in the idea of a world like this now. (Just when I'm on a likely permanent monster boy kick, haha...) Part of me wonders whether the security blips were really accidents...the free-roaming boys might have started a little scheme...to make sure they get more interesting prey...
in any case, this is great! Again, the CONCEPT. I love, love, LOVE where this is going~
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks so much!! (Ahaha, monsterboy worlds NEED to be a thing, frankly.) And wow, I wondered if anyone might catch onto these sneaky bois! They indeed understand more than meets the eye~ Much smarter than those silly pamphlets give them credit for.
I really appreciate the feedback, thank you! I'm glad you liked the idea! I'm certainly having fun with it~
Posted by mystarfear 4 years ago Report
the 'how much can they understand' point is just really fun IMO, and I like how we get the human's (biased) view with hints of the demis comprehending more...the bit where they followed the girls 'because they're hungry' was probably my favourite. TOO RIGHT they're hungry!
I'm just repeating myself by now but again, I'm hooked already. Love this, and I'll love to see what goes down next~
(and I also want to say, I hope you're finding your footing, not just on here but in general. Seen how you're feeling estranged; hope stuff works out on your end)
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Well, the pamphlets aren't completely lying---most of the giant monsterboys are more animal than human. There's just a few exceptions~ But yeah, glad you liked that bit. They clearly didn't want livestock or fish. Hmmm wonder why~
I don't mind! I'm really happy that you're enjoying it thus far!
(I appreciate that, thanks. Things haven't really changed, but I guess I'll just give it time.)
Posted by PandaESL 4 years ago Report
Interested :)
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks! Glad to hear it~
Posted by dotto 4 years ago Report
Aaaaah, this turned out wonderful!! your writing's always a delight to read and really honored that my characters can be apart of it. <3 Also super happy that Kaleo's in there, man. Boy needs his fish.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thank you, Dot~! I'm especially glad to hear that you're enjoying it, since your char(s) are in it. Haha. I hope the characterizations have been okay!
Posted by greenfan9843 4 years ago Report
This is reallll nice.
Feedback like your other commenter-- let the suspension of disbelief flow through!!
Eager for Part 2: The Sequel.
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks a lot! And I appreciate the feedback!
I've been all over the place with writing lately and new ideas, but part two will certainly be coming at some point~
Posted by Nalzindar 4 years ago Report
Wow, this was awesome^^ I got a Jurassic Park feeling when reading this one and I am looking forward to see what befalls our lovely two ladies in there^^
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks a lot~! (And that's part of what inspired it, as mentioned in the description. lol) Glad you're enjoying it thus far!
Posted by Randomdude5 4 years ago Report
This really makes me want a part 2. I love M/f vore with digestion scenes and the way you write the characters pulls me into the story.
Posted by Chameleonette 4 years ago Report
Thanks! I certainly plan to write the second part when I get inspired and motivated to do so. And there will definitely be eating and digestion in that part.~ Haha Glad you're enjoying it, though! Thanks for the feedback!
Posted by Thesis 3 years ago Report
So... No updates? You give up on it? Please say no.
Posted by Chameleonette 3 years ago Report
I just haven't written more of it yet or felt the spark to continue. 2020 has probably been the hardest year in writing for me yet. I barely accomplished much of anything this year.
Posted by Thesis 3 years ago Report
So there's still a hope, thanks God. Let's hope 2021 will be good for everyone.
Also, a friend of mine talked about a roles fic you wrote, but i couldn't find it here.
Posted by Chameleonette 3 years ago Report
There is indeed still hope! I do find it harder to go back to things I have written parts of and sometimes new stuff comes out sprinkled between, but I've been writing is part of my new weekly goal system, so I hope, bit by bit, I'll return to over a dozen unfinished things I have. I can't promise which will be when, but it's something I'm slowly working toward.
Hm, what fic is that? Roles... Friends With a Weird Secret, maybe? I never did upload that here, come to think of it.
Posted by Thesis 3 years ago Report
Yes, that's the one. 2017, it's been a long time. But apart from that, i've loved it, we kind of see ourselves in Hannah's skin since it's not really easy to find someone in this fandom. Kane discovering a new fetish is awesome too, he's late but really into it. When he says "If you’d really like to experience it from the inside, I’m sure I could arrange that" it would be like what... A camera? People are doing a lot of this recently, get a endoscopy cam and film their insides, posting in XXX sites.
There's a reference of Kane and Hannah?
Posted by Chameleonette 3 years ago Report
He was just teasing her, not offering to use a camera or something. Literally like "Hey I could just eat you, then you could experience it from the inside." But it was inferred to make her think of it that way.
There's no references of them. I don't honestly know if I'll ever continue that story. lol
Posted by Thesis 3 years ago Report
:/
Posted by WATCHMAN 2 years ago Report
Will there be a part two?
Posted by Chameleonette 2 years ago Report
Someday, perhaps. But I can't make any promises. I haven't been able to write in some time.
Posted by Mechdragon1k 2 years ago Report
As in writer block or as it medical issues. I hope you are okay.
I am hoping for a happy ending but knowing your work, I will still enjoy a unhappy ending.
Posted by Chameleonette 2 years ago Report
Writer's block. Generally feeling zero motivation nor inspiration to write.