Hey there! Went ahead and gave your game a try and I liked it a lot! I think it has a lot of potential. I didn't get through all of the currently playable content but I got through a decent amount of it, and here's what I thought:
My impressions:
-I love the whole mirror to adjust the options thing
-Love the BGM choices, very fitting for the scenes you chose them in!
-The character art is super cute! Really added a lot of life to the game!
-I love how many little things are interactive with, even if just for flavor text. They really add a lot to the game.
-I also like what appears to be the feature to auto-heal after a battle, or at least for the tutorial.
-The NPCs are really vibrant! I didn't speak with all of them, but I loved what the ones I did talk to had to say.
-The queen refers to herself in the plural "we," which feels unnatural. There might be a reason for it which I haven't found yet.
-The rabbits were super cute!
-I liked the bat girl scene, and it was awesome to see some of your personal preferences shine here, i.e. the betrayal stuff :3
-On that note, the vore scenes were all good, but I think they were a little too generic! I'd love to see more of your own personal loves shine in the encounters.
Some suggestions/bugs:
-Although it worked just fine for me, it might be useful to include a link to the RTP in the thread's OP. You could also mention it's an RPG Maker game (though I don't blame you for not wanting to do that, since that's a turn off for some people).
-Nyusha uses "..." a lot in her monologue. It's cute if the intention there is to make her seem listless, but if not you could vary it up a bit.
-Is attacking or guarding supposed to give TP? I thought I read in the tutorial, but it doesn't seem to do so.
-I failed escaping from the chicken on my first try. Not sure what stat would rectify that, but it might be worth adjusting.
-If the plaque on the jail bars is supposed to be readable, it doesn't work.
-It looks like you changed the name of the ring you get in the warehouse to "Thieving Ring," but the chest still gives you the old typo "Theif's Ring"
-The queen doesn't quite make it to the toilet for her disposal
-The bat boy scene is nice, but you should probably reconcile the fact that Ruya is there while it's going on, unless you did and I missed it
-It would be good if you add a description to the usable items that says what they do, so you can know before you use them!
-I got asset load failures while fighting the bat queen, so I wasn't able to finish the fight. Not sure if that's on my end or what.
Some typos/mistakes I noticed:
-Closet at home: "some time soon" -> "sometime soon"
-Farmer: "most of the stocks" -> "most of the stock's"
-The guard on the east side of the castle town doesn't have quotation marks in Nyusha's response, unless it's not intended to be dialogue.
-This happened again with one of the queen's attendants, so I wasn't sure.
-After getting knocked out by the queen: "a cold, dirty floors" -> "a cold, dirty floor"
-The queen digestion scene goes between tenses at some point.
-If you tell Ruya you're not ready to go yet in the warehouse, her portrait is missing from her response.
Anyway, no need to respond to everything I've said, feel free to take it with a grain of salt
can't wait to play through the rest of it and see what you come up with next!
Renael wrote:Nyusha? more like Poosha.
This TBH