I've been writing off and on for a while, and this has been my first semi-consistent foray into sharing my writings publically. I first started uploading my writings to ekas about a year ago, but this is my first time trying out the forum side of things. Let me know what you all think, and what I can improve on!
The Oasis in the Mountains:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/739655
Merry Christmas Zaiha:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/747584
Food (CW: Graphic Digestion):
https://aryion.com/g4/view/763051
Sharing my writing
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Sharing my writing
Last edited by SpudWoke on Sun Sep 11, 2022 1:48 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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SpudWoke - New to the forum
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Re: New to sharing my writing
Your writing is as lovely as always <3
Hellebore’s ferocious and insatiable appetite gave me chills! I think my favourite aspect of the first story was, unsurprisingly, the implied fatality :3
The second story with Zaiha and Olephia takes a much more sensual tone, though with a nice amount of eroticism as well. It was quite fun to explore Christmas through the eyes of these two enchanting beings.
Last, the digestion story. This one took my breath away. Several times actually. There isn’t much I can say beyond the fact that I so desperately wish I could’ve been in her position ‘^-^ so I’ll let that speak for itself.
Comments on the stories overall: I really enjoy your world building, it can only be described as excellent. And another noteworthy aspect of your writing is the word usage, grammar, and overall readability. Though that might be a minor compliment, it is genuinely something I appreciate about your writing, as the smallest of errors tend to take me out of the setting immediately.
Hellebore’s ferocious and insatiable appetite gave me chills! I think my favourite aspect of the first story was, unsurprisingly, the implied fatality :3
The second story with Zaiha and Olephia takes a much more sensual tone, though with a nice amount of eroticism as well. It was quite fun to explore Christmas through the eyes of these two enchanting beings.
Last, the digestion story. This one took my breath away. Several times actually. There isn’t much I can say beyond the fact that I so desperately wish I could’ve been in her position ‘^-^ so I’ll let that speak for itself.
Comments on the stories overall: I really enjoy your world building, it can only be described as excellent. And another noteworthy aspect of your writing is the word usage, grammar, and overall readability. Though that might be a minor compliment, it is genuinely something I appreciate about your writing, as the smallest of errors tend to take me out of the setting immediately.
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CaliTea - Been posting for a bit
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Re: New to sharing my writing
I've posted two more stories!
Substitute Teacher, Part Two: https://aryion.com/g4/view/819641#item-itself
Night Swim: https://aryion.com/g4/view/820023#item-itself
Any comments, questions, or critiques would be much appreciated!
Substitute Teacher, Part Two: https://aryion.com/g4/view/819641#item-itself
Night Swim: https://aryion.com/g4/view/820023#item-itself
Any comments, questions, or critiques would be much appreciated!
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SpudWoke - New to the forum
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Re: Sharing my writing
I've posted a new story.
The Horizon's Promise: Per Amicitia Ad Astra:
J'kabi is an Aizu, the newest species to join interstellar civilization. Looking to prove herself and show the other species what the Aizu can bring to the table, she joins the crew of the independent shipping contractor Horizon's Promise. But when disaster strikes, the ship is left spinning through space a million miles from help. With most of the crew presumed dead except for her and the ship's engineer Cygnus, they must utilize each other's strengths to survive, repair the ship, and get back home. To do so though will require some unorthodox and creative approaches.
https://aryion.com/g4/view/831856
The Horizon's Promise: Per Amicitia Ad Astra:
J'kabi is an Aizu, the newest species to join interstellar civilization. Looking to prove herself and show the other species what the Aizu can bring to the table, she joins the crew of the independent shipping contractor Horizon's Promise. But when disaster strikes, the ship is left spinning through space a million miles from help. With most of the crew presumed dead except for her and the ship's engineer Cygnus, they must utilize each other's strengths to survive, repair the ship, and get back home. To do so though will require some unorthodox and creative approaches.
https://aryion.com/g4/view/831856
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SpudWoke - New to the forum
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